Military Technologies and Revisions

Part 1: My initial rough draft was about a page short of the 8 page requirement. I think part of this is because I was not critical enough. I went into some detail about everything, but not enough detail where it was needed. I gave each part of my paper equal detail. In some places maybe even too much detail to non-critical parts. I need to delete some detail from places, but add much more to the sections critical to my controlling purpose. I am writing about how the new military technologies, as well as the previously held differences between each branch of the military, are "re-defining" what a soldier is, and what he does. I have not yet looked at my personal comments, but just from re-reading I can see what needs to be done, I'm not sure how to do it at the moment.

Part 2: I have not given much thought to the presentation of my paper yet. Being that it is about military technology and how it changes the soldier and combat scenarios, I think I might put a government seal and make it look almost like a presidential report. I have also added some information about how these technologies becoming more available, can save lives. So it might work to make it look like something that could be handed to the president to read as a briefing on what these technologies are doing in combat, that benefit the country, and the soldier.