Military Technologies and Revisions

Part 1: My initial rough draft was about a page short of the 8 page requirement. I think part of this is because I was not critical enough. I went into some detail about everything, but not enough detail where it was needed. I gave each part of my paper equal detail. In some places maybe even too much detail to non-critical parts. I need to delete some detail from places, but add much more to the sections critical to my controlling purpose. I am writing about how the new military technologies, as well as the previously held differences between each branch of the military, are "re-defining" what a soldier is, and what he does. I have not yet looked at my personal comments, but just from re-reading I can see what needs to be done, I'm not sure how to do it at the moment.

Part 2: I have not given much thought to the presentation of my paper yet. Being that it is about military technology and how it changes the soldier and combat scenarios, I think I might put a government seal and make it look almost like a presidential report. I have also added some information about how these technologies becoming more available, can save lives. So it might work to make it look like something that could be handed to the president to read as a briefing on what these technologies are doing in combat, that benefit the country, and the soldier.

Whistler Blackcomb SB '10

I have spent this spring break, like I have every single one since I can remember. Snowboarding in Whistler Blackcomb, British Columbia. Being that I just got sponsored by Oakley this year, this one is just a lil bit different. I am here with 3 of the top pros in the snowboarding industry, as well as 2 other accomplished ams from across the country. Getting to snowboard with my idol, Terje Haakonsen, is a dream come true. I have also enjoyed getting to know Women's Superpipe Gold Medalist, Hannah Teter, and Men's Superpipe Gold Medalist, Shaun White. We have spent the past week and a half here partying together, living together, and snowboarding together. It is currently perfect here. 45 degrees, not a cloud in the sky, and fresh powder from a storm last night. We are all riding very well and will hopefully have some of the photos we have captured in an article in Transworld Snowboarding Magazine, this July. Hope everyone is having as much fun as I am.

Shanks and Other Blogs

I chose to combine blogs 1 and 2. To start of with the Shanks blog. I read through those who had posted already. I believe that in ways, Shanks' blog is academic inquiry. He uses his experiences and conversations with friends and scholars, to formulate his own ideas about how to teach, and human nature. If I'm not 100% wrong, this is what academic inquiry is about eh? It was very hard for me to find any other "scholarly" blogs. Most of them were just random people blogging about whatever they have to talk about. Being myself an aspiring amateur snowboarder and wakeboarder, I am a member of many blogs in those "cultures" if I may. Those of us who are highly accomplished and have many tricks under our belts, help the younger, less experienced riders learn tricks. I think blogs are a great way to get up to speed if you are just starting a new hobby. As well as a great place to chat with other people who enjoy what you enjoy in life.

So it is tuesday during spring break, and i have done nothing so far. Which has been okay with me because i find that sitting at home doing little things that don't require alot of money or a plan of knowing what you are going to do is okay. The weather here is really nice...50 which some say is cold. but still very sunny which is nice. I love getting to play basketball with my brother, it is amazing how much they grow while i'm away at school. He is thirteen and becoming as he says " a man". His entire presence is different. Boys are so much different than girls are. It is like they feel that they are so much better than anyone. They have a new confidence that is funny to watch. I do love my brother though... so it is okay.
I don't really have any super big plans over break. I am really excited though to get my hour massage. My boyfriend kyle bought it for me for our 4 year anniversary. I am super pumped for it because massages are amazing. It is one place i am actually able to relax and not have to worry about a thing. i find that with school and hw and just being up and busy non-stop can ware you down. So this should be a nice way to relax. Thanks kyle! <3
I have honestly forgotten about the blog. I was so caught up with writing my rougt draft that i forgot to post on here. I was not sure how to write my draft which made me really struggle with getting it done. I hope that the comments that we get back will reall y help me with fixing it into a better paper.
Well maybe i will remeber about this blog more over break, but until then i'm done.
Hope everyone is enjoying there break.!!

Reider Participating

Not sure what we are supposed to be doing on here. Just gonna check in and post a blog about my hecktik life right now. I am currently living in Green Bay to pursue a career in hockey. We practice for four hours 5 days a week. I am taking 4 online courses and trying to juggle family, hockey, and school. I am also a sponsored snowboarder and spent the first two weeks of this course in Sweden. Thus, I have fallen quite far behind, especially in this course. The first two papers are very confusing to me and any help, or hints would be greatly appreciated.