During a meeting I had with the Adam after writing my paper he told me that I need to look at the sources through the mind of one of the sources I was using. And by doing that I would be able to create new ideas and not just repeat what the sources are saying. So that is what I am working on during this revision, also narrowing down my controlling purpose, was told it was too broad. Don't really know how I am presenting this paper, I guess I am just trying to make it as clear and readable as possible.